Hi~! I'm AsianPrincess61, and I'll be your editor! :D
I must say, that I really like the flow of this piece as well as how relateable the character is. Doing what she did must've been really hard huh? :)
Admittedly though, I'm not quite sure as to what else I should say regarding your piece. The grammar looks good to me, and the sentence beginnings seem pretty diverse and not too repetitive. :D
Keep up the good work, and good luck in this competition!
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Date: 2009-09-14 11:07 pm (UTC)I must say, that I really like the flow of this piece as well as how relateable the character is. Doing what she did must've been really hard huh? :)
Admittedly though, I'm not quite sure as to what else I should say regarding your piece. The grammar looks good to me, and the sentence beginnings seem pretty diverse and not too repetitive. :D
Keep up the good work, and good luck in this competition!